Wednesday 23 November 2016

LO4: Revised Script

 (Dialogue by Louis Norton, Stage Directions and Camerawork by Alister Martin and Editing Decisions and Locations by Taighlor McNally )


One improvement we had was to embolden the location, whether it's interior or exterior and the time of day, which is what I did. I also updated the incidental music queue to include the music's name and 'Fade up' instead of fade in.




We also needed to break up our screen directions as they typically included camera work and editing techniques that are supposed to be justified to the right. For example, I did this by placing 'Cut to' (editing technique) and then the camera work below this, such as 'Over the shoulder medium shot' and then the camera angle/movement below this such as 'High angle of Sam'. The screen direction has then just been justified to the centre, like the 'A stranger is cautiously walking up'.

We also needed to break up our screen directions as they typically included camera work and editing techniques that are supposed to be justified to the right. For example, I did this by placing 'Cut to' (editing technique) and then the camera work below this, such as 'Medium shot' and then the camera angle/movement below this such as 'Slight high angle of Oscar'. The screen direction has then just been justified to the centre, like the 'The stranger puts their hand on Oscar's shoulder'.



One improvement we had was to embolden the location, whether it's interior or exterior and the time of day, which is what I did.


One improvement we had was to embolden the location, whether it's interior or exterior and the time of day, which is what I did. I also updated the incidental music queue to include the music and 'Fade up' instead of fade in.We also needed to break up our screen directions as they typically included camera work and editing techniques that are supposed to be justified to the right. For example, I did this by placing 'Cut to' (editing technique) and then the camera work below this, such as 'Close up' and then the camera angle/movement below this such as 'Pan up on forest'. The screen direction has then just been justified to the centre, like the 'Oscar walks through rough terrain on his way before eventually stopping before the forest. Oscar observes the forest confidently. He takes his first step into the forest.'.

 
Louis Norton had done this page and broke down our screen directions as they typically included camera work and editing techniques that were supposed to be justified to the right. For example, he did this by placing 'Cut to' (editing technique) and the camera work below this, such as 'Medium shot of Oscar entering a clearing' and then the camera angle/movement below this such as 'Slight high angle of Oscar'. The screen direction has then just been justified to the centre, like the 'Oscar is now walking in the forest.'. We had also missed out a screen direction for Oscar when he spoke, which was to be 'startled', this helps the actor know they're supposed to be startled when using this piece of dialogue.

 
Louis Norton broke down our screen directions as they typically included camera work and editing techniques that are supposed to be justified to the right. For example, he did this by placing 'Cut to' (editing technique) and then the camera work below this, such as a 'long shot' and then the camera angle/movement below this such as 'high angle'. This was also the first part of the script that needed to state the graphic effects needed, this being the 'Green shadow filter'.

 
Louis Norton broke down our screen directions as they typically included camera work and editing techniques that are supposed to be justified to the right. For example, he did this by placing 'Cut to' (editing technique) and then the camera work below this, such as a 'Medium shot' and then the camera angle/movement below this such as 'low angle'. He also added the graphic effects needed, this being the 'Green shadow filter'. The screen direction has then just been justified to the centre, like the 'Sam throws Oscar to the ground. Oscar struggles up to his feet and runs away, shocked'.

 
Louis Norton broke down our screen directions as they typically included camera work and editing techniques that are supposed to be justified to the right. For example, he did this by placing 'Cut to' (editing technique) and then the camera work below this, such as a 'Ped up shot from Oscar to Sam' and then the camera angle/movement below this such as a 'Level shot'. He also added the graphic effects needed, this being the 'Green shadow filter'. The screen direction has then just been justified to the centre, like the 'Oscar finds a trench that he can hide in. Sam calls out from the forest.. He also updated the incidental music queue to include the music's name and 'Fades out' instead of fade off.

 
Louis Norton broke down our screen directions as they typically included camera work and editing techniques that are supposed to be justified to the right. For example, he did this by placing 'Cut to' (editing technique) and then the camera work below this, such as a 'Close up of Oscar' and then the camera angle/movement below this such as a 'Level shot'. He also added the graphic effects needed, this being the 'Green shadow filter'. The screen direction has then just been justified to the centre, like the 'Oscar lookes pained and begins to gather his courage.'.
 

 
Louis Norton broke down our screen directions as they typically included camera work and editing techniques that are supposed to be justified to the right. For example, he did this by placing 'Cut to' (editing technique) and then the camera work below this, such as a 'Medium shot of Oscar' and then the camera angle/movement below this such as a 'Low angle'. He also added the graphic effects needed, this being the 'Green shadow filter'. The screen direction has then just been justified to the centre, like the 'Sam starts walking up, slowly, to Oscar with a look of curiosity'.
 

Alister Martin broke down our screen directions as they typically included camera work and editing techniques that are supposed to be justified to the right. For example, he did this by placing 'Cut to' (editing technique) and then the camera work below this, such as a 'Close up of Oscar' and then the camera angle/movement below this such as a 'Level shot'. He also added the graphic effects needed, this being the 'Green shadow filter'. The screen direction has then just been justified to the centre, like the 'Sam continues to walk towards Oscar, his expression changing from curiosity to malice.'.

 
Alister Martin broke down our screen directions as they typically included camera work and editing techniques that are supposed to be justified to the right. For example, he did this by placing 'Cut to' (editing technique) and then the camera work below this, such as a 'Close up of Oscar' and then the camera angle/movement below this such as a 'High angle'. He also added the graphic effects needed, this being the 'Green shadow filter'. The screen direction has then just been justified to the centre, like the 'Sam lunges at Oscar's throat and hold him in the air.'. He also emboldened the location, whether it's interior or exterior and the time of day. He also updated the incidental music queue to include the music's name and 'Fade up' instead of fade in.

 
Alister Martin broke down our screen directions as they typically included camera work and editing techniques that are supposed to be justified to the right. For example, he did this by placing 'Cut to' (editing technique) and then the camera work below this, such as a 'Wide shot of both Oscar and Sam' and then the camera angle/movement below this such as a 'Level shot'. He also added the graphic effects needed, this being the 'Green shadow filter'. We had again missed out a screen direction, this time for Mark, for when he spoke, which was to be 'worriedly', this helps the actor know they're supposed to be startled when using this piece of dialogue.

 
Alister Martin broke down our screen directions as they typically included camera work and editing techniques that are supposed to be justified to the right. For example, he did this by placing 'Cut to' (editing technique) and then the camera work below this, such as a 'Close up of Mark' and then the camera angle/movement below this such as a 'Low angle'. The screen direction has then just been justified to the centre, like the 'Both Sam and Oscar look at each other.'.

 
Alister Martin broke down our screen directions as they typically included camera work and editing techniques that are supposed to be justified to the right. For this page it was just the camera angle/movement below which was the 'Low angle'. The screen direction has then just been justified to the centre, like the 'The camera shows Oscar's surprised face and cuts to an establishing shot of where the forest once was.'. He also updated the incidental music queue to include the music's name and 'Fades out' instead of fade off. He also included the credits and the logo.

Tuesday 22 November 2016

LO4: Gaining Feedback from Client and Evidence

Me, Alister Martin and Louis Norton presenting and recieving feedback based on our script.

The notes I made on the feedback of the script from the Writer's Group.

LO4: Production Schedule

Production Schedule (Made by Taighlor McNally):

LO4: Meeting Minutes


Meeting Minutes
(Written by Taighlor McNally)
23/11/2016
1.     Apologies:
Everybody is present.
2.     Roles in the Team
Louis Norton (LN) will take part in writing the questions for feedback and help. Will ask questions to the client.
Alister Martin (AM) will ask questions to the client.
Taighlor McNally (TM) will also write the questions, as well as send the client them and the script and ask the questions to the client.
3.     Agenda items: Previous Agenda, Questions, Contacting the client, Feedback.
4.     Deadlines: 23/11/2016
5.     AOB: -

Distribution:
Minutes
Agenda Item
Discussion
Action
Time Frame
Previous Agendas
These have been met in the time frame we set.
TM, LN and AM
1 Hour
Questions
Write questions to seek out improvements from our client ‘The Writers Group’, the questions will be open; to seek out a more detailed improvements. The Questions will be;

·       Does the script as a whole sound practical? Could we make a film based on it?
·       Could you give us three positives based on our script?
·       Could you give us three improvements based on our script?
·       Does the script fit into the genre, a psychological thriller, how could we make it fit more?
·       Have we developed our script into a shooting script? Could we add more editing techniques and camera work?

TM and LN
1 Hour
Contacting the Client
Email the client at ‘thewritersgroup16@gmail.com’ and give them the script and questions to get feedback.
TM
1 Hour
Get feedback from the client
We will ask the client our five probing questions, we’ll get feedback and record/ take pictures for evidence.

TM, LN and AM
1 Hour

LO4: 5 Questions for Improvements and Feedback

    (Questions done by Taighlor McNally)
  •     Does the script as a whole sound practical? Could we make a film based on it?
  •     Could you give us three positives based on our script?
  •     Could you give us three improvements based on our script?
  •     Does the script fit into the genre, a psychological thriller, how could we make it fit more?
  •     Have we developed our script into a shooting script? Could we add more editing techniques and camerawork?